学 生：DAVID
学 历：国内某中学高三在读学生
语言成绩：TOEFL成绩：101分，SAT1成绩：1900
申请学校：密歇根大学安娜堡分校等前30名校
案列挑战难度：DAVID申请的是生物专业，他平常参加的课余活动以及获得奖项都相对较少。DAVID专攻于理科，所以在文字表达以及处理上相对都存在很大问题，不知道文书需要重点突出的地方在哪里，也不知道如何通过文书将自己的能力以及优势展现出来。
录取过程：申请寄走时间：2009年9月30号
录取通知到达时间：2009年10月23号
成功回顾：DAVID相对不擅于将自己的优势表现出来，而且DAVID参加过的活动以及获得奖项相对较少，为了将DAVID能够更自信的展现出来，文案同DAVID一一进行细致筛选其参加过的活动，并根据DAVID提供的活动素材来设计如何通过这些活动展现DAVID的各种能力。通过两周多的时间和DAVID敲定了所有细节之后将申请材料于2009年9月30号寄走。在不到一个月的情况下，DAVID就顺利拿到了全美排名23名的大学-----密歇根大学安娜堡分校的录取。
下面我对这几篇申请文书的一个点评：
1. 作文要求是说一个经历。
申请文书的要害，就在于你能不能有一个见识和眼界的升华。这才是申请文书的关键所在。
I bought the books at the market and on the Internet according to the fixed plan. Soon, the first batch of over 150 books was transported to the library and books were highly recognized by teachers and students as well as school leaders. For the books, we still needed careful management. Our library did not have a complete electronic system, so I organized all the librarians to write the codes and catalogue in handwriting and set strict borrowing and lending regulations. One month later, most of the students desired more books. Through researching seriously and discussing with other school leaders, the principal decided to give us another grant of 80, 000 yuan (RMB) to purchase more books of different subjects and increase the quantity of popular reading on science and literature. Because I had accumulated experience in the first stage, I carried out the principal's decision smoothly in the second stage. No sooner than the second shipment, the foreign language book database was built. For this, my name was listed by the school on the library as the "Youngest Librarian who brought in the most books." Many of my teachers and classmates would come by just to say "thank you" "I appreciate your efforts for the books". After they borrowed form the library, I am so proud of it.
里面有一句倒装句表达不对，但是不影响意思的传达。大家看最后两句话的联系和意义。图书馆的藏书多少是小事，但是，帮助人和传达知识的火种更加值得关注。这里，要把这件事情写透了。
2. 下面是第二篇的作文。
一个挫折，一个让你记忆深刻的经历，一件改变你看法的事情。
这篇文章的内容最后也用在了别的学校的申请文书里。我没有重新选择另一个主题，而是仅仅对文书的框架做了小调整。另外，MUN的例子现在已经太多，建议同学们要慎重使用。
要有升华，要有提炼，要有进步。你，这么一个小毛孩，现在逐渐长大，有什么感想和感悟？这些感悟不是从天上掉下来的，而是一次次挫折和挑战中来的。有的人失败了，后退了，你呢，后退也要给出一个说法。这个说法，就是升华。
Should I now continue as usual, leaving this mountain unclimbed like a loser, or should I start to try on a totally different perspective? Things changed after thinking and struggling many days, I realized life could be perceived from another perspective. Life is about the journey, not the destination itself. I was always the top student in my class and gradually I was almost led to think naturally that I must pursue and get every reward I want. But things are not always this case. Failure from other perspective is sometime a victory in life. Nevertheless, I now have come to realize that rewards and recognition are not the end, whereas the perseverance to pursue perfection leading up to self improvement can be as important as a trophy on the wall. Looking back at MUN, I began to understand the true meaning of the event. The MUN is not a place where we compete in our English proficiency or where we step over one another so that we can reach to the top. The MUN is a place where we, the promising youth, gather together and share our interpretation and responsibility towards the world where we live in together, and a place we communicate and acquaint ourselves with the aspiring contemporaries.
文章的主要精华就在这几句话，没有别的花巧可言。另外，前面的主题是关于登山和登山的挑战，这里和下面都要有个呼应，文章才是贯通一气的。
